Engineering Question

Hello, this assignment is basically about a project that have to be done with my group. My group did split the work between us but as a first draft my part was off a lot and it needed to be edited and be more related to the topic

the topic is building/improving the community garden at our University which San jose state uni
My parts were to write The need of the project and The executive summary which I failed in writing the executive summary and here were I need you to write an executive summary and I need you to review and fix The need of the project and if you can add more you can. I will provide my paper so please read it carefully as well as the Instruction of how to write the executive summary and the need of the project and it parts please only follow these instruction. Also please don’t use any other/ out side sources that are not provided in the paper because these we submitted them as our only references. at first I wrote it more related to urban communities and then I changed to be related to sjsu community please make sure it is related to the SJSU community
I’ll also provide you my professor comments please follow them as much as you can
also revise it for clarity
Just revise the need of the project and itsparts because these are my parts the other one juust provided them to give an idea of the project

professor comments
“Basically, it looks like you have blended your introduction and your executive summary together in your paper.”
“I do not see the magnitude of the need addressed in your paper. I also don’t see what the 21st Century needs are. What are the gaps at SJSU that your proposal will fill? Your sustainable solutions section is written with more clarity than your other sections. I can understand a majority of this section.” “Most of your work will need revision for clarity.”

1page and the revising part